Let's break it down, dance style!
Wait, which X game is that from... I'm guessing 4-6, but I don't know which for sure.
Not bad at all. I enjoy it's rather straight forward take on the theme, and the instruments used aren't half bad. It's a little muddy in the EQ - I'd suggest bringing the upper EQ up a bit and lowering the mids a tad. The mixing is a bit muddy; I can't hear what the theme is supposed to be with the background elements so close to the forefront.
It would loop better if you just started when the theme comes in and cut everything before it (probably a second and a half).
Again, I liked it, despite the EQ and mixing - VG arrangements are great, especially when they're done well :)